If the River Were a Man

Posted on March 29, 2007 by Elizavetta

This poem is written, loosely, in the form of a pantoum. I am experimenting with this form because I find it very evocative of the language of magic; of spells and incantations. And since I am working on some new magic (she says slyly), well… it always pays to practice.

if the river were a man tonight
outside my window
I would promise to love him
as if he would always be here

outside my window
like he is tonight
as if he would always be here
unhurried and brushed smooth
by the borrowed light of a complicated moon

like he is tonight
silent with the sorrows of his constant freedom
unhurried and brushed smooth
by the borrowed light of a complicated moon
like a snake in the grass, slipping always away

silent with the sorrows of his constant freedom
I would promise to love him
like a snake in the grass, slipping always away
if the river were a man tonight

Comments

  • reciprocal solitude on May 13th, 2007

    Lovely!

  • Elizavetta on June 8th, 2007

    Reciprocal,
    Thank you… and welcome! Nice name, by the way ;)

  • Paul on October 13th, 2008

    What a beautiful poem, carefuly entwined imagery. It’s so rare to find someone who recognises the connection between poetry, incantation and magic. In fact I think you and me make two, I wish I knew more. This has wonderful sounds and would be beautiful read aloud as a conjuration.

  • Elizavetta on October 18th, 2008

    Paul,
    I’m of the same mind about your poetry as you seem to be about mine. It seems your equation might just be true!

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